Dearest of the dear I beg you for this chance
I never thought that I might last to ask you for this dance
The lights are low and candles burn
Please let me take you twist and turn.
The moon is out right over there
I can see it looking past your hair
I can see it looking past your dress
Perhaps I’ve simply made a mess.
But you look so amazing here
And though I trip and stutter dear
I hope that you will take the time to see
What’s inside that I may be.
I dream that you can see a thing
Inside of me that I cannot
And love me from the first bell ring
As I fight this awful lot.
So let me have this dance tonight
And let it be the way you dream
And maybe I can last the fight
And maybe more if you would deem.
A Soul's Walk 
1940s. very 1940s dinner party dance request.
I suppose that it is (chuckle).
Really enjoyed this one.
I’m glad you did.
i just read this again, and i realised that if i were the recipient of this poem, i would feel feel very jack nicholson’s girlfriend (diane keaton) in “reds.” that’s another film that you must see, if you haven’t already. it’s amazing.
nicole,
given your 1 for 1 track record (as I haven’t yet seen the first one) I will see it (obviously then, no, I haven’t seen “reds.”). Especially since the first one was such an amazing knock-out-of-the-park. I’ll let you know what I think (but I think I’ll probably watch “Brief Encounter” again first). Cheers.
I think a poem is a good rhyming poem when it’s meaning captures your interest rather than obvious/loud rhymes….like this poem, it was only on re-reading that I noticed “oh it rhymes too” =) You’ve captured the moment perfectly =) the questioning lines are the most endearing. Take care, Que.
That is an interesting way of putting it. I will give that some thought.
Upon rereading my comment, I’d just like to clarify that I meant you have not utilized what i would say are obvious/forced rhyming just to make your poem work.
Noted.
And thank you for reading (and rereading). I really appreciate it. I also appreciate your writing.